Star Shower, A Twine Story

I just finished up a Twine story, Star Shower. It’s a story about an incoherent, alien influence on a young psychic girl; it’s also supposed to be the introduction of a traditional serial fiction. I took all of chapter 1 of a story I was writing (the drafts of which used to be on this blog) and converted it into this twine story. I did this mostly because I already had all of the prose text, so I could just focus on making it “Twine”-y. Unfortunately for me, the text did not lend itself extremely well to my ideas and I had to do a lot of rewriting.

I also did some things in a really roundabout way, which you’ll notice if you’re familiar with Twine and look at the mess of code in the passages – rather than make new passages I nested a lot of triggers into the same three or four passages and had Players bounce around them, changing things each time.

While it felt impressive to do, the reader doesn’t really get any different effect out of it, I feel, than if I just made new Passages for each “state change” I wanted to introduce, and have the players navigate through them via direct links. I guess doing so loses some of the “nonlinearity” of it, but there wasn’t a ton of that there.

It is a pretty decent game I think, with 9683 words, most of which are content.

Anyway, I had a lot of fun writing it. If you find any dead ends or weirdness (that did not seem intentional) tell me so I can fix it. I spent a long time searching for dead ends, but might have missed some. By the way, there is only one possible ending.

Finally, for people who just like my weird Amera stuff, there’s a lot of info there on Amera that is not in any other source on this blog, so if you’re following the setting it may interest you.

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